Wednesday, June 02, 2010

Log lines? Tag lines? One sentence pitches?


So I'm attending my first ever writer's conference this month (Write! Canada in Guelph, Ontario) and I'm working myself into a nervous frenzy with log lines, tag lines, and one sentence pitches.

I'll be honest with you. I'm not sure I understand the subtle differences between the three. I've worked on this manuscript for almost two years, but I could really use another year to figure out how to pitch the thing.

Here's what I do know. They're supposed to be under twenty words (or as close to that as you can make it). They need to make someone want to hear more about your story. They are helpful to use when pitching your novel or when querying publishers and agents. They are not the same thing as an elevator pitch.

These are my contenders so far:

1. A struggling Hamptons innkeeper guards her business, her son, and her secrets when an ex-con from her past arrives seeking redemption.

2. The owner of a struggling Hamptons inn protects her business, her son, and her secrets when her ex-convict husband returns.

3. A struggling Hamptons innkeeper guards her business, her son, and her secrets when her ex-convict husband returns seeking redemption.

Anyone want to help a sister out? Chime in and let me know which is your favorite, or I'm open to suggestions.

19 comments:

  1. I'll have to participate one week...Thanks so much for visiting me; this looks like a fun blog to follow!! :-D

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  2. I think I like the first line best. I've read through all of them a number of times, and, yes, definitely the first!

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  3. Thanks for visiting my blog earlier! I'm looking forward to checking yours out!! Hope you have a wonderful evening! =)

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  4. Hi, visiting from ifellowship! Thanks for stopping by my blog too`

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  5. Hi, thanks for following my blog. I am visiting from iFellowship and am your newest follower.

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  6. I like #3 the best. :) How exciting about the conference! Hope you have a GREAT time! ♥ Michelle

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  7. What a fun blog you have!!! I'm your newest follower from iFellowship.
    Blessings to you,
    Sue

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  8. I like 1 and 3. I don't know, telling that the ex-con is also the ex-dh may be giving away too much info.

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  9. Thanks for checking out my blogsite earlier today. I vote for No. 1, it's very succinct and keeps a bit of mystery....who IS that ex-con? What are her secrets? etc. You can always reveal later that it's her husband, but I'd prefer to keep the suspense :)

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  10. Oh, you will have to let us know how it goes! I have always wanted to go to a writers conference to pitch my book but get so nervous. Good luck!
    I'm following you from book blogs:)
    www.momstheglue.blogspot.com

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  11. I'd go with 3 :)

    Have a great weekend and hope you pay me a visit too! I found you through the hop.

    Yesenia, Silly Little Game

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  12. I DEFINITELY like the first one. The reference to the 'ex con from her past" is much more intriguing than the word "husband".

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